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Beat Star Seed
Title : Just a Hero. Posts : 54 Join date : 2013-01-06 Age : 36
| Subject: Crossover//Antagonist: Miira 13th January 2013, 11:30 pm | |
| Character Information.
Miira:
Meaning: His name is an anagram of Mirai or "Future" in japanese. Age of Birth: ???
Gender: Male
Race: Makaioshin(Gods of the Kings of the Demon Realm)
Height: 2.2 m.
Voiced by: Andy Chandler
Appearance:
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A blue Humanoid Demon with a bulky build-up. He has Red eyes, Blue pale sking and white hair. He has a cybernetic chest plate, with the Symbol of his organization the TimeBreakers in the center. He wears what appears to be a gray toga above his red pants and red shoes. From the chest plate two apparent power lines go to his neck, pressumed to boost his power.
One of his noteworthy characteristics is his skin, although blue it's pale; Likely from being confined in hell and as, sunlight and light do prove as a hindrance to him he does avoid light if possible. His Red eyes can shine in the dark, casting fear upon most enemies. Althought a great leader, Miira keeps ornaments to the least, as he feels they serve little purpose, the toga he wears is because his second in command, Towa insisted on him at least having one elegant piece of cloth. Most of the times, the expressions on his face are either stoic or with a sarcastic smile; Also, he has pointy ears granting him a high ear ability. His hair although messy, is according to him, one of his trademarks and no comb will make his hair down.
Skills/Abilities:
Most of his skills are determined by "Blast Counters" or charged energy used for his skills on his chestplate, it take about 2 minutes to accumulate one and his skills requiere diverse amounts. When doing so, Miira can't use more than certain energy attacks or move at all. Also it stores his ki for better control. His Chestplate serves further purpose as three years ago, he was badly injured by Beat. Due to this, his body was gravely damaged and his ki control was lacking. Either too much or too low, The chestplate serves as a regulator. Also, from his chest plate he can "Lift the restriction" by voice command and fight at full power, but due to the beating he took, he cannot be in that form for long or he'll tire out easily, his ki attacks won't work and even will find himself un able to move. Therefore, the plate is made from a very resistant material yet, it is not indestructible.
Also, Miira can power up to a very high level. Capable of creating small tremors though they can be felt far away, cover the sky in darkness, conjure up a storm, create red lightning around him and such. But if he does, due to his body's condition he has to rest for a long time after he fights, so if he does this it has to be for a VERY good reason.
Miira's abilities include heavy attacks and many energy beams. They are divided in:
Skill: An ability unique to Miira. They spend little to no energy but consume Blast counters.
Blast-range attack: Beams, rays or stuff that are launched from a distance. They cause fair damage and consume a rather high amount of energy
Illusory: Attacks unique to Miira as the ruler of hell, these are cast by looking into his eyes and casting a vertex of illusions and mentally weakening the foe. As they are to look into his eyes, they are from up close to mid distance.
Bukujutsu(Flight): Miira can fly at will. No blast counter at all(Skill)
Magic Materialization: One of his main resorts, spend little energy. can create weapons out of nowhere with which to fight his opponents, Swords or spears. But doing so takes some time. Weapons are of the dark element so can be dissipated with enough light. No side effect.(Skill, consume 1 blast counter)
Fūin kaikō-sen(Sealing light beam): From his hands, he puts his hands in front of him, and then he fires rings of energy that paralyze the opponent. For any battle, though can be dodged as trajectory is linear. Spends 2 Blast Counters. Can only use Demon Destructive wave or Finger beam barrage and if he does he will tire himself out.(Skill/Any range)
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Akuma no yōna shōheki(Demon Barrier): This is a result of using very advanced ki manipulation to compress the energy to the point of being hermetically sealed so that nothing more than voices (in an atmosphere) or low energy photons, such as visible light, can pass through. Miira uses this for defense and no conventional attack can pull through, only an attack which goes above his energy output. Used in extreme cases, consume 2 blast counters. Cannot use any type of energy attack for 5 minutes.(Skill/Any range)
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Jigoku no Kiba(Hell's Fang): Miira dashes at the opponent with his hand engulfed in darkness, stunning the opponent, then extends his other arm and strikes with an uppercut. Somewhat easy to dodge as one can see the hit, although parrying will still damage due to dark energy. Used for one on one fights.(Melee-range)
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Carnage Scissors: Performs a very fast, dashing sword/Fist strike/Kick, then spins and releases two crossing spikes of dark energy (hence the name "scissors") from slashing the ground with his sword/limb. Covers a lot of ground very quickly and fair accuracy, one can jump to the side or try to parry. If using a weapon, a very big amount of light will stop the attack.(Melee-range)
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Hades' Guantlet(Gantoretto Hādesu): Disappears from sight. appears from above and with a darkness engulfed fist, pounds the foe to the ground. Can be dodged by moving from place or parrrying(Melee-range)
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Gokuken(Prison fist): Grabs the enemy with his hand filled with dark power and makes darkness explode at point blank. Can evade if fast enough. Explosion sends opponent on a groundslide.(Melee-range)
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Maō Tosshin(Devil King's Charge): Charges at enemy at a high speed and with both arms, begins to grind them in a bear hug like fashion, then, uses dark power to create a small explosion, sending the target flying. Can dodge the initial charge or stop him with a light attack(Melee-range)
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Maō no Ashi(Devil King's Foot): A sort of counterpart to Beat's Ryūshōken. Miira advances on enemy and first gives a strong kick, then gives them a direct high kick and sends them to the ground. Used for 1 on 1. as a physical attack it can be parried or dodged like any other. For lone fights only.(Melee-range)
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Finger Beam Barrage: Miira fires lots of red energy beams from fingers. use little energy but they do little damage, so to harm opponent notefully at least 4 need to land. Easy to dodge but very fast. Used for multiple foes or for trapping a foe into running away. Requires 1/4 of his ki in chest. ( Blast-Range)
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Demon Destructive wave: Fires a red, yellow or blue beam from open palm to foe. Depends highly on chest amount energy and needs energy to recharge before launching again. Speed is high so it requires timing to dodge, Damage isn't fatal. Requires 1/4 of his ki in chest. Used for one to one fights.(Blast-range)
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Jigoku no Arashi(Hell's storm): Fires many ki waves at the opponent and creates a monsoon of energy on target, badly damages environment. Energy balls aren't accurate so they mostly damage with the explosion afterwards. Have little to no accuracy but after explosions are a problem to deal with; can be avoided once timing has been read. Requires 1/2 of his ki in chest. used for both multiple and one foe fights.
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Cocytus:The user fires one beam from his hand that causes everything it hits to freeze. Hand need to rewarm hand after launching it taking, 1 minute. Accuracy is fair, so it can be dodged by running or jumping. But it freezes environment and leaves chilled air that in high amounts can start to lower target's temperature. Mostly used on one-to-one fights. Requires 1/2 of his ki in chest. (Blast-Range)
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Phlegethon: Charges heat from a Lens in his chest plate, and then shoots a lethal ray of fire at the opponent from an open palm. Afterburn is severe. Hand needs to cool down for about 2 minutes. The Beam is mortal melting anything in its path; as heat, it's difficult to control it's direction so it's mostly shot straightly thus making a somewhat predictable pattern, requires a lot of energy in chest plate and needs two minutes 2 recharge, Requires 1/2 of his ki in chest. (Blast-range)
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Vaitarna: By staring in to his eyes a small circle of energy is created beneath foe. Creates an Illusion in which the foe sees Hell(if he or she has a lot of darkness in their heart) Or a river of pure water(If he/she has a pure heart) in either case, both leave the target mentally tired. Spends a high amount or energy. The effect is much less notable in the Senshi as they have righteous hearts, nevertheless it's still dangerous. Can be dodged by avoided the circle once acknowledged or avoiding eye contact. Uses 1/2 of his ki in chest.(Illusory)
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Rikudo Rinne(Six Paths of Reincarnation): Sends little blasts of light which surround opponent making he or she unable to move. Unknown to the foe, the little energy sparks and the eye contact with Miira cast an illusion in which the foe falls into one of the Six realms of desire of Buddhist tradition, as a Makaioshin, Miira can move the soul of the foe if corrupt enough:
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Jigokukai(Realm of Hell): For those who hurt others, mountains of spikes, red rivers of blood, a sea of fire await those who fall here. Gakikai:(Realm of Hunger): For those who were blinded by greed or lust, they fall here and become hungry ghosts with little more than a bit of skin, open ribcages, big bellies and bones left. Wandering for eternity, consumed by hunger and looking for food, waiting for anyone to die and feed on their corpses. Chikushōkai(Realm of beasts): Who falls here, is turned into an animal in allusion to the sin committed.(E.G. violence: Bear. Taking advantage of the weak: vulture or crow, ) and is destined to live in a world akin to prehistory, where only the strong survive and the weak die to feed the strong. Shurakai(Realm of violence): Filled with steel weapons, it is a hell for rage, killers and violent souls. Whosoever falls here is destined to fight and kill for all eternity spilling blood on the ground. Jinkai(Human realm) The realm we live in, but much more cynical, sarcastical and sinful. Filled with an uncertain destiny, uncertain emotions, pain, love, sadness and misery. Who falls here, is destined to restart their life from zero. Tenkai(Realm of heaven): The most dangerous one. The palm of Buddha, from here one can fall in any of the 5 realms described above.
If the foe has a heart filled with negative emotions, he or she will fall into one of the 6 hells and die in six days. If, however the foe is filled with pureness and justice it will be a mere illusion and the foe will lose consciousness for hours or days, this case being, the Sailor Senshi. Consumes all ki in chest.(Illusory)
Maō jigoku ken(Devil King's Hell Fist): The anti-thesis to Beat's Riot Javelin, it's a very destructive attack. Lifts the palm of his hand and begins to charge energy. His hand becomes red and launches a very powerful energy blast, capable of blowing from an entire building to a city itself. It's very fast so it has accuracy, it can be deflected by someone with a higher power level or by a strong source of light. Consumes all energy in his plate.(Blast range)
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Occupation: Ruler of hell, Leader of the armed organization "Timebreakers"
Personality:
Ambition: Control all dimensions and time itself.
Likes: Hot places, energy recharges, darkness, deserted planets, milk.
Dislikes: Shinto, sacred seals, light, noisy people, justice, wine.
Weakness: Somewhere in his chest plate, sunlight, light based attacks(Sailor Venus' beam, Sailor Moon's tiara etc. Sailor Mars' seals) arrogance. Chestplate overusage: Faulty ki control, lack of protection, Tiredness, lack of skill control, unable to fight at full power for too long.
Miira, is surprisingly regal and somewhat elegant in comparison to then normal demon stereotype, however, he is a cold blooded murderer and enjoys torturing others, and can have somewhat of a maniacal demeanor if angered. To spread death and terror, Miira, enlisted the help of remnants from Frieza's Planet Organization, and the Red Pants Army(Succesors of the Red Ribbon army) thus making him have a considerable force known as the "Timebreakers" who are able to wreak havoc across time and space with their technology. Miira is closely related to the Kai's that rule the galaxy, as he is, their counterpart. Due to this, he doesn't see himself as evil, but as someone who is liberating living beings of unstable emotions such as love, affection and such, to accelerate their "evolution" and make them into demons, makais or many things of the sort.
He mocks Beat and the Senshi by telling them their "Justice" is inexistent, and thus only an illusion of the human heart. To him emotions are merely excuses humans make to justify for their actions and thus, they waste their lives. By turning them into youma, makais and such, they will understand the triviality of their life, and understand the one truth in the universe. Death, despair and lies. Despite his arrogance Miira is not without caution, as he has several ways to come back should he die. The Timebreakers, the Dragon Balls and unbeknownst to him, Beat's hatred. feeding off the latter's hate keeps him binded to this world. He is also a charismatic leader and a genius strategist, as all the factions within the Timebreakers look up to him. Although coming from another dimension, he has a vague knowledege of Beryl, the Moon kingdom and events that happened on the Senshis' Earth. He is reuniting energy for an unknown purpose. It is said the he drinks milk because his comrade Towa, drinks too much and becomes to noisy to bear...
Biography/History: The ruler of hell/Makai, Miira once long ago planned an invasion on the whole North Galaxy but a Fellow Youma, Chaos, betrayed him and thus, the door to hell, Ginnungagap, was closed. For many years, Miira sought how to escape Makai, and found the key to bypass Hell's gate in the Dragon Balls. In Beat's World, in A.D. 2000 he manipulated people to summon Ultimate Shenron, open the Ginnungagap and make the world into a living hell. For many years, he reunited remnants of Frieza's Planet Trade Organization, enlisted the Red Pants Army and any human mercenary who wanted to join him. Seven years later afer his rebirth, he was handed defeat at Beat's Hand, foiling his plan. Right then, his fellow Makaioshin, Towa revived him and reconstructed his body with a chest plate to make him more pwerful and control his enery more efficiently. Both set off to another dimension. Now in the Sailor Senshis' World, he is reuniting negative human energy for an unknown purpose.
Quotes:
Ah...the all calm darkness...the night is young and too beautiful to let it slip.
You don't seem to know your place...perhaps I should show you, yes?
You who dare oppose fate, it's over.
Love? If you think you can win with that...you're mistaken. This world...no, this universe has only one truth. Death. You all will embrace this mistake...with your LIVES!
Punish me in the name of...? Very bold, yet foolish.
To Beat:
Beat Kisaragi...it's been what...3 years?
To draw breath in the same dimension as you once again...the Kais up there seem to have a twisted sense of humor.
Ah! I can sense the Saiyan awakening in you...like the good old days! come, monkey, shed my blood if you can!
It's been a long time...monkey.
What's the matter ape? Done already?
Your impertinency might earn you a knife in the gut from yours truly.
He, he...Ha, ha! Why can't you defeat me?! Use the few gears left in your brain, monkey!
Don't betray my expectations...ape.
Musical Themes: Distorted time (Miira's theme on Dragon Ball Online): https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=R2-9KQCPR6I
Nightmare Fiction (Musical Theme Miira vs Beat By Daisuke Ishiwatari) https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=W7Ph1T7n6vM&hd=1)
Role Example:
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The darkness of space was something one could always admire. An infinite number of stars right before the eye. Cold and dark...just fit to his tastes. Although not Makai, space wasn't bad. And it seemed everything was at your grasp.Thinking these concepts, a bulky pale man with bluish skin, white hair stared at the beautiful Planet Earth from his ship. He wore a red under shirt and a gigantic chest plate on with a sort of infinity symbol on it. His Toga moved along with him, as his red eyes took in the beauty of the blue planet. In his left hand he held a glass with milk, drinking, as if bidding his time while savoring the beverage.
-"Sir, I'm coming in."-
-"Do come in, Zarbon."-
Miira turned around and was greeted by one of his men, with a green skin, green hair, a good looking face, wearing a planet trade organization armor. Zarbon gave a reverence to the pale man, his green hair tied in a sort of ponytail, moving as gracefully as he did. He wore a scouter on his right eye and on his forehead he had the same symbol on Miira's Chest. The green alien read a report he'd worked one.
-"Sir. We've confirmed that this Earth has no defenses in comparison to the other one we tore apart. The technology here is very primitive, and their power levels roughly go over 50 to 400."-
-"How...uninteresting. I had assumed people here would at least be able to use energy but as per your report I take it they all live peaceful lives, yes?"-
-"Yes sir. However, our forces have met several capable warriors, apparently five to ten females defeated our forces on a certain place called "Japan". Apparently, not only were they capable of shooting energy but had vast control over the elements."- Zarbon eyed the report and read carefully.
-"Five...to ten...Ah! Yes! it passed me along...the guardians of the galaxy."- Miira turned and eyes his subordinate with an evil light in his eyes and returned his gaze to the Earth.
-"Guardians?"-
-"Yes. The ones who killed that traitor...Chaos and her...pathetic variants...I have heard they're very beautiful. It sure is better than having to gaze upon the horrible form of the Cold family, especially Frieza. Wouldn't you agree Zarbon?"- Miira drank milk and as if making a toast, raised his cup towards the planet.
-"You are right sir. Elegance, strength and beauty go together. But...should we really be this calm? They are powerful."- The soldier stood up and waited a response from his superior.
-"Zaarbon, my friend. When will you learn that all living things are better when they're at war? It would please me to no end to see them in battle. They defeated Chaos, I'll give them a little credit for that. Did you by chance see any of their skills?"-
-"Yes sir, among what we've been reported we saw, thunder, water and Ice, fire, light and some sort of...rose."-
-"Rose? they use such a lowly plant as a weapon? I see. Do they know of our existence?"- the Makaioshin's eyes wandered around space as he asked.
-"No sir. I believe they...think we're remnants from Chaos' army..."-
-"Then we Still have the surprise Element at hand. Good! it is time to start the "Endless Waltz"! For when my melody of chaos starts to play, All living things will dance in the palm of my hand! Earth...once again I stand before you...however this time...I WILL tear you apart!"- The man finished his milk and jerked his fist towards the blue planet.-"Apropos of nothing Zarbon...where did HE wander off to?"-
-"He? Oh, you mean that lowly monkey that thought he defeated us?"-
-"That same one."-
-"Well, after the other Earth was restored...he vanished without a trace."-
-"I see."- his red eyes turned deep red. -"That miserable Saiyan...when I see him again I will...give him my special treatment. It's a shame he's gone, for without him, apart from these guardians, there will be no fun. It's so pitiful, his hate was a delicious dish, one rarely found in the galaxy. Hatred so powerful and determined, burning as if they were black flames!"-
-"If he does come back, he will not live to see you sir. I can assure you that."-
-"Don't worry, he is a useful piece in my waltz, for if I should these guardians think they can best me...HE can keep me alive! He he...ha ha! If you're out there monkey...do come back. And witness helplessly once again how we tear apart your beloved Earth...! Ahahaha!
Role #2
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Beat stood on a small isle far away from Japan, amidst the pacific Ocean. There was small grass, some palm trees; It was undisturbed by the presence of man. One could only hear the sound of the wind rushing through the grass or trees, above him a beautful starry sky. He'd enjoy it if it weren't for one thing. Miira, the man he wanted dead stood before him.
“Miira…!” The young man said gritting his teeth. “You freak…! Why did you call me all the way out here? I can kick your carcass anywhere.”
"Ah, the calm darkness...so beautiful. Why? you should know. A one to one fight Beat. A gentlemen's battle."
"Stop toying with me!" the young man angrily lashed out.
"You want me dead. I want to fight you. Really 'Tis not hard to put 2 and 2 together..." Miira said somewhat tauntingly.
"Why you...!"
The small crashing of the waves and the gentle breeze on the grass was disrupted by Beat dashing right to where the demon lord stood, he gave him a straight jab to the which Miira simply dodged with easefulness.
"This much? You've won over my men with this low power level?" the lord said with a disappointed expression.
“I’ve won over them! And now you go DOWN!”
“Kisaragi…Are you holding back? You’d best tread with care…Lest you want to be gravely injured.” The unimpressed Makaioshin recommended.
Beat kept attacking with force, five punches 2 in the abdomen and three in the face. Miira was hardly damaged. Sweating a bit, the young man prepared to kick him but before he could get his chance, the pale man sent him with a kick straight onto a rock, destroying it.
“Beat…doesn’t this scenario…bore you?"
"What the heck are you saying?! You brought me here!"
“I want no interferences Kisaragi. One to one. But…this sea, this night is too calm…we need to raise hell here!” The chestplated man said. “Beat, you may have beaten some of my men but…Let me show you…yes! Let me show you what true DARKNESS really is!"
The lord began to charge up his energy slowly. As if ordered by him, dark clouds slowly began to come above the calm sky and the calm ocean became a raging water. The small crashing of waves was replaced by a violent current, as if a hurricane had hit the island. The wind also became increasingly violent. Right before he could digest all this changes, a drop hit his forehead. Rain had started to pour above them. It wasn't calm either, it was a storm. In the clouds, lightning as red as blood could be seen and the same bolts came out of Miira's body. The demon, for his part, had all smooth as silk. Beat had bitten the bait. No senshi was going to come an save him now, and apart from the “exercise” he was going to get, to beat the Senshi this battle was necessary. The young saiyan’s hatred, despair and misery were like a power increase to him, so he’d lured him out alone. And he was going to show him the difference in power and might as well, scare the humans.
"You bastard...stop! What are...you doing?!" the saiyan boy said, sweating.
“Setting the stage of course! The drama, the action! Two enemies killing each other under a dark night’s storm! Perfect for our little ruse! Try and stop me…monkey!”
The red bolts soon extended to the ocean and the tide begun to turn even more violent, severe and unforgiving. The calm sea waves turned to a raging ocean and hit with force the island’s shore.
“Come on Beat! Surely you’re not scared…at this level! Come on! Attack me!”
"Darn...it all..."
-------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- At Rei's place, a small tremor started. usagi ran below a table, Rei grabbed on to her bed, While Minako joined Usagi in her refuge. Artemis and Luna struggled to keep balance in the floor.
"Uah! Earthquake!" Usagi alerted.
"Below the table! Quick!" Minako added.
“No. This isn’t a natural shockwave…” Artemis said, looking at the ceiling thoughtfully.
“I’ve…never felt such dark power…” the black eyed miko said surprisedly.
“It’s…dark power. But how can it cause a tremor of this magnitude?!” the white feline inquired to himself.
“Unless…it’s him…that pale demon…Miira!” Luna deduced.
The tremors stopped but, Artemis had an anxious gaze on his face. Understanding the cat and the horrible power that she felt, Rei quickly called the Odango haired girl who got out of the table.
“Usagi…the TV! Hurry!” Rei ordered. “Turn it on!” The miko said hurriedly.
"News just in. A small shockwave hit the city of Tokyo. Reasons are thought to be an earthquake in the northwets part of the pacific ocean. Dark clouds have been forming on a certain are, the same where the tremors started. It is believed an undeground volcano exploded. We advice the people to take proper measures." the news informed.
“T…The Pacific Ocean?! That’s far away!” the black cat exclaimed.
"It's got to be him!" The raven haired girl exclaimed.
"Rei, quick! Make your fire readings!" the long haired blonde requested.
The group looked at the fire as dark clouds hovered above the ocean… -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
Beat smiled at the climate his rival had created. Cold sweat and rain fell on his cheek. He knew very well he couldn’t win.
"I didn't thought...we'd be so different. Even with my power I can only hold him back...heh heh..." cold rain and sweat hit the saiyan. "I'm crazy...I could die and I'm excited...!"
“All done.” Red electric bolts covered the pale man. “Let’s start the act! Carnage Scissors!” The monarch dashed and with his right foot kicked the Saiyan in the chest, right then he turned around kicked the ground, 2 dark spikes of energy made the young man go airborne. In mid-air, the demon used the Demon destructive wave and hit Beat who was hurled into the raging ocean. Miira crossed his arms,unimpressed.
"Come on. With something like that...someone like you can't be damaged saiyan!"
The raging waters apparently drowned the young man, but the pale man knew better. When he sensed something, he turned around and encountered the newly appeared Beat’s punch with his own fist. The clash caused a small hole beneath their feet. Miira punched the young boy in the face and sent him to the muddy floor.
"This is all...? you need motivation perhaps I should start by destroying Japan? Oh, I know...I'll kill that girl you're growing fond of...What's her name?"
“You bastard…STOP!” Beat got up and hit him straight in the face before he could continue to talk about harming "his" girl.
"Not enough." the Makaioshin said, crossing his arms.
“Demonic Freak…! Kinryuha!” Beat said extending his hand.
“My turn. Up you go!” before he could fire his energy beam, Miira used his knee to make the youth go airborne striking him in the stomach.
“Impossible! What speed…!” the spiky haired boy exclaimed.
"Gauntlet Hades!" a dark imbued fist sent the young man into the ocean once again.
In the dark waters, the options were running out for Beat…
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| | | Tsuki-love♥ RP Admin Neptune Emeritus
Title : Myuteer ~ GC's official Harumichitic Posts : 10050 Join date : 2012-07-06 Age : 27 Location : Kaguya Shima
| Subject: Re: Crossover//Antagonist: Miira 14th January 2013, 5:26 pm | |
| Hello Beat. Like with your other character submission I am asking you to edit some things before Pluto or I will get to review this profile.
Could you combine the two personality descriptions as one and describe his appearance more so it would fill the two paragraph minimum? Can you also add a role-playing sample to your profile? Thanks |
| | | Beat Star Seed
Title : Just a Hero. Posts : 54 Join date : 2013-01-06 Age : 36
| Subject: Re: Crossover//Antagonist: Miira 14th January 2013, 9:15 pm | |
| Done. Anything else needed please do Inform. |
| | | SeleneHime Pyramidal Crystal
Title : Previously: Sailor Pluto Posts : 2880 Join date : 2011-08-21 Age : 29 Location : Texas, USA
| Subject: Re: Crossover//Antagonist: Miira 16th January 2013, 4:13 pm | |
| Okay, can we get a bit more pros/cons on Miira's attacks? Right now, Miira is a major powerhouse. Unless intended for an RP with only one or two people, a large scale, a major antagonist, or whatnot; it'd be advisable to give the capabilities drawbacks. |
| | | Beat Star Seed
Title : Just a Hero. Posts : 54 Join date : 2013-01-06 Age : 36
| Subject: Re: Crossover//Antagonist: Miira 16th January 2013, 5:35 pm | |
| Sure, can do. Any attacks you want definitely out? |
| | | SeleneHime Pyramidal Crystal
Title : Previously: Sailor Pluto Posts : 2880 Join date : 2011-08-21 Age : 29 Location : Texas, USA
| Subject: Re: Crossover//Antagonist: Miira 16th January 2013, 9:04 pm | |
| Okay, we discussed this in the evil, carnivorous CB, but here is a basic to-do list:
Expand on the attack section. What it looks like, what it does, what the weaknesses are. How can an opponent either escape or fragment the source? What situations are they best used in?
Double-check formatting. Copy from your Word Processor into Notepad, as it removes internalized formatting, and then onto GC. Apply bold/italic coding where it is needed. (This isn't a must, but it would make re-assessment easier on the eyes, as well as easier on future readers.)
There are still random capitalization here and there. Check in your Appearance section for more, and I'd recommend another sweep for that.
I can't promise a review tomorrow, as I try to do my homework (all of it) the night it's assigned, but I'll try for Friday. Good luck. ^^ |
| | | SeleneHime Pyramidal Crystal
Title : Previously: Sailor Pluto Posts : 2880 Join date : 2011-08-21 Age : 29 Location : Texas, USA
| Subject: Re: Crossover//Antagonist: Miira 1st February 2013, 7:17 pm | |
| Bump~.
Is this ready for review? |
| | | Beat Star Seed
Title : Just a Hero. Posts : 54 Join date : 2013-01-06 Age : 36
| Subject: Re: Crossover//Antagonist: Miira 1st February 2013, 9:40 pm | |
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| | | SeleneHime Pyramidal Crystal
Title : Previously: Sailor Pluto Posts : 2880 Join date : 2011-08-21 Age : 29 Location : Texas, USA
| Subject: Re: Crossover//Antagonist: Miira 15th February 2013, 7:37 pm | |
| Apologies about the delay! Somehow this had gotten marked "read" and I'd glazed over it. *huggles.*
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