I just submitted this to the contest, but I wanted to get some feedback as this is my first attempt! I tried to make it as detailed as I possibly could. Please let me know what you think!



It looks sort of sloppy around her eyes, as I tried to take the light out of them for reasons listed below.
And I pasted setsunas mouth onto her

About the Girl
Name: Lola Viovi
Name Meaning: Lola, to me, is just a “vixen-ish” name, but Viovi is a reference to her planet of origin, Viovos. (Vee-Oh-Vose)
Birthday: March 20th
Eyes: Silver, large and thick-lashed, round “D” sort of shape with jessica rabbit-esq eyelids (Does that make sense?)
Hair: Long, thick, and wavy. Black besides her heart shaped odangoes, which are red.
Skin: Pale, smooth, and glowy. Skin like porcelain
Height: 6ft
Weight: 160lbs
Facial Structure: Heart shaped, with high cheekbones, wide face with far apart eyes, plump lips, and a small nose.
Build: Slender, willowy, with soft curves. Muscular arms and legs.
Distinguishing Marks or Traits: Has a Marilyn Monroe-esq beauty mark above her mouth.
Strong Points: She is persuasive, great at keeping secrets, independent,
strong-willed, physically strong, a very good listener, wise, and
graceful.
Has Trouble With: She has trouble with dealing with
inner-conflict, telling the truth, trusting others, following through
with plans, making friends, keeping friends, and being faithful to
lovers.
Dream: She had a dream once, but her past traumatized her so much, that she
forgot about them.
Fear: She has a fear of people discovering her true identity, and coming to terms with her past mistakes.
Personality:
Lola has a very gentle and sensual demeanor. She is an extreme
introvert. She seems very distant, and cold to others. It sometimes
seems like shes absent-minded, or in another world. In these times,
she's struggling with her memories of her planet and galaxy being
destroyed by an unknown attacker. She often seems overwhelmed and
extremely stressed due to these memories, as to her, it was all her
fault. Deep down, she is a gentle and sensitive girl, she's very
motherly and nurturing, but she hides this from others because she does
not trust a single person. This is because of the fact that she does not
know who destroyed her galaxy, she believes it could be anyone, so she
does not reveal her true colours or open up. She remains mysterious to
others, and they all find her very alluring and attractive, as she has
the power to make someone fall for her by staring into their eyes.

Past:
She was once Queen of Viovos. She was chosen to be Queen not out of
Royal Lineage, but because she was the strongest warrior in her galaxy.
Her family, her mother, father, and older sister all lived in the
Viovian palace with her. Both her parents were Viovian soldiers in their
younger years, but had since retired since their daughter became queen.
Her older sister, Sadie, was her closest and dearest friend, she looked
up to her, and loved her very much. She didn't have many friends on her
planet, as many tried to manipulate her, and exploit/use her royal powers for their own personal gain. She lost the need for friends besides her sister after many years of this.

She was the only one in her family to have special powers beyond enormous
strength,
and their was never any explanation of this from anyone. She grew up
scared of her own powers, and as she became an adult wondered of their
origin, and why she was the only one in her family to possess them. She
was contacted by an unknown group of warriors, they kept their
identities hidden and went by the alias of the “underworld death clan”.
They appeared just before the edge of her galaxy, claiming they had a
message for the Queen. They claimed to know the origin of her powers,
and tried to make a deal with her, that they would tell her the full and
true story if they were permitted to come into her Galaxy. She had been
feeling lost and lonely for a very long time before this, and she
thought that this
was the answer, so she let them in. They remained
dormant for a long time, she didn't get any answers, and they didn't
seem to appear anywhere. So she waited. They continued to let people in
from their
army until it reached full power, and they attacked all
the planets, destroying each one of them. They saved her planet, Viovos,
for last. Before they were able to break through the atmospheric
barriers of
the planet, her family sent her out into the galaxy in
order to save their Queen, just as they broke though. She watched all of
her court, soldiers, family, and civilians of her planet die because of
her. It
traumatized her greatly.

Relation to Present: Due to
her past, she has Post-Traumatic Stress Disorder, which causes her to
break down and be overwhelmed. She trusts no one, as she was never able
to see the identities of those who attacked her galaxy. Her cold
demeanor is also due to her past, she lost her dreams and hopes when
all
of this happened, and has been overcome with the need for revenge. She
cares a lot of guilt and shame towards herself for what she had done.

Planet of Origin: Viovos of the Opposta Galaxy
Nickname: Lo or Vivi
Gender: Female
Sexual
Orientation: Lesbian
Age: 19
Blood Type: AB
Sun Sign: Pisces
Favorite Gemstone: Ruby
Favorite Color: Ruby Red
Favorite School Subject: Psychology
Least Favorite School Subject: Gym
Favorite Food: Cherries
Least Favorite Food: Olives

About the Senshi
Sailor Name: Sailor Vixen
Realm of Influence: the Underworld, the sky, stars, and wind (smoke).
Transformation Stick: The Black Stardust Rod.
It's black rod with a ruby-red ball on the bottom, and an black
inverted star at the top, with a dome covering the star.
Transformation: Vixen calls “SUPER
VIXEN
BLACK STAR, MAKEUP!”. Thick black smoke billows out from the ground,
swirling around her. It covers her completely (including her face),
turning into lace as it surrounds her skin, and she bends her
knees
and floats into the air, arms downwards. In midair, the black lace
explodes into deep red stardust (only her face is visible through this)
black lipstick covers her lips, an inverted black star appears on her
forehead. She opens her eyes, the stardust disperses, revealing her
Sailor-fuku. She lands on the ground, her body positioned diagonally,
her head facing forwards, legs crossed over one-another and her hands
behind her back.
Colors: Black and ruby-red
Outfit: see above!
Weapon: The Vixen Ball-and-Chain, looks similar to this:

but with more spikes
Vixen produces it from the inside of
her
white locket. It extends about 6ft altogether. The staff part of it is
able to be used as a deflector or sheild of physical attacks (does not
work with magic).
Attack 1: Super Vixen
Lace Annihilation: A black
sphere with a diagonal ring around it (the shape of Viovos) gathers and
grows bigger in her hand. It absorbs red sparkles/stardust into it,
flashing black and white lights appear around it. She calls the attack
and raises it above her head. It disappears momentarily, and appears
above the enemies head. It comes crashing down around them, causing an
explosion-like noise, and grows around them into a dome, trapping them
inside. Inside the dome, smoke appears, covering them entirely, and it
forms into lace. The lace forms to their skin and tightens and tightens,
suffocating them until they are shattered into pieces. They then turn
into black stardust.
Attack 2: Vixen Stardust Smash!: Vixen produces
her ball and chain from the inside of her white locket. She flings it
slightly forwards, then pulls it back quickly behind her. It extends
through the air, gathering her energy, pulling in black smoke and red
sparkles/stardust into it. She then calls the attack, and flings it
forward with immense force, it smashes into the enemy. They fly
backwards and turn into stardust in
midair.
Attack 3: Black Star
Underworld, Reveal!: This is her most powerful attack, which uses her
full power. Vixen produces the ball and chain, and raises it into the
air, spinning it counter clockwise above her head. Black smoke and red
sparkles/stardust gathers from the ground and makes it way up, spinning
around her. She calls the attack, and slams the ball into the ground,
causing the ground to shatter and split open before her, revealing the
underworld, racing towards her enemy. When the crack is below them, a
thick black dome
surrounds the enemy, ripping them apart, and it
turns them to dust. The dust falls through the crack, into the
underworld, the ground seals back up. Vixen is unable to fight after
using this attack, so
she only uses it as a last resort or to protect a loved one.
Power Color: Ruby Red
Symbol:
I wanted the emphasis to be on femininity, but also relates to the
earth (pointing downwards) and sky (arrow upwards) its actually a V and X
to relate to her name, aswell.
Fighting Style: She prefers to fight alone only. In physical combat, she likes to fight close range with
her
ball and chain. Using her powers, it doesn't really matter when she is
as they always hit the attacker, excluding Vixen Underworld Reveal.
Senshi
Personality: The only change that really occurs in her personality is
that if she is reminded of her past in someway, specifically the
destruction of her planet and the killing of her sister, she becomes
overwhelmed and incapacitated, falls to the ground, and is completely
unable to attack in anyway. At these times, and unknown savior, a white
light, comes to her rescue and takes her away from harm. If she is not
reminded of her past in anyway, she never loses a fight.
Also, only as a senshi, her eyes have no light in them due to the fact that she lost her dreams. She is
only able to survive because of her locket, which contains her super life force and past dreams.
Strengths: She's powerful in all realms and elements.
Weaknesses: She's weak to being manipulated by enemies, and to mind tricks and illusions.

Interesting design, I like her planetary symbol a lot. That's something I have trouble coming up with myself.

Thanks! it took a few tries to get it right but im happy with it

I agree the symbol is good, and the character isn't bad. I think you went a little to much in detail, but that is just me.

My suggestion is that if you post a pic of your character, I wouldn't spend so much time describing what she looks like.

I love the detail in the character, because for me that makes or breaks a character. Especially when you are in RPG land most of the time pictures aren't accepted.



I do love the symbol its very unique and something you would definatly find in SM. Though I am curious to why she is named Vixen since when I think of that name Female Fox is what I refer it to.

@Cordelia, thanks for your suggestions. I went into detail on purpose though, I want people to be able to imagine her as well as I can, or atleast close, haha. I made the picture after I wrote the profile, I just thought it was a nice extra thing, but I could of went without the picture.

@Siren, thanks honestly, I got vixen from the song super vixen by garbage (it's one of my favourite songs), just adding sailor to it because I love sailor moon so much. I was using it as my online name for a while before I made her. It makes me think of a seductress, a very sensual woman, or a "femme fatale". I named her that for both of those reasons. I guess female fox could work too, it sort of relates to her personality in my weird mind.