Tuxedo Mistress Lotus Crystal
Title : That girl with a Sailor Jupiter tattoo =) Posts : 10799 Join date : 2012-07-25 Age : 35 Location : São Paulo/Brazil
| Subject: Tuxedo Mistress's A Serious Case Of The Jacket 4th August 2012, 5:34 pm | |
| Guys, please, review it, tell me your thoughts =) Thanks to Whitehexe for helping me with some mistakes =)
*FLASHBACK*
Ah, summer was finally gone! The weather was getting a bit cold though, and I had forgotten my jacket at home. I figured I should buy a new one; I was at the mall after all...
"Motoki! I think I should buy a new jacket."
"Okay, Mamoru, let's go."
Motoki was nice. He was my best friend - but you already know that. Anyway, we searched for some time at the mall and then I saw the most beautiful girl ever. She was blonde, bubbly, with bright blue eyes, laughing at a jacket. Okay, I get it. It's pea green, hideous. But the way that girl made fun of it, and seeing how pretty she is, I decided I was going to buy it. That way, if I crossed her on the street again someday, she would at least look at me - even if it was just to laugh. Just me luck, Motoki knew her and started talking to her.
"Hi Usagi! Nice to see you!"
"Hi Motoki! Not working today, huh?"
It was great that he was talking to her – I now knew her name. Usagi, my little Bunny... And she used to go to the Crown! I realized I should start paying more visits to my friend at his job. All of a sudden, I noticed she was looking at me. I froze for a few moments then, rushed into the store! I couldn't talk to her. Not yet, anyways.
"Hi! Welcome to the store. My name is Akane, can I help you?"
"Oh, hi! I was wondering; that green jacket... do you have it on my size?"
Well... That's when the plan "Make Usagi look at me" was put into action!
"Hey, Motoki! What do you think?"
"Damn, Mamoru! That thing is awful! Why do you want to buy THAT one?"
"Well... You'll see..."
And that's how I bought my green jacket. But you cannot tell anyone about it.
*END OF FLASHBACK*
The dark-haired man finished telling the story to a little girl with pink hair who burst out laughing and saying, "Wait, dad! So, you bought that ridiculous pea-green jacket just so you would have something to talk to mom? I'm so telling her that! MOOOOOOOM!"
"Chibiusa, don't!"
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Joshua916 Pyramidal Crystal
Posts : 491 Join date : 2012-08-20 Age : 38 Location : California
| Subject: Re: Tuxedo Mistress's A Serious Case Of The Jacket 24th August 2012, 12:54 pm | |
| How cute. I love how you have been putting the effects of a timeline into your stories. I'm guessing this one should have been the first that I read since how it captivates on the "why". Its beautiful to see a different reasoning behind the jacket, since how I often wondered why he had it, but how you incorporated it into the storyline and made it "the reason", I have to say its marvelous! Keep up with your writing skills; its something you have a skill for. |
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Tuxedo Mistress Lotus Crystal
Title : That girl with a Sailor Jupiter tattoo =) Posts : 10799 Join date : 2012-07-25 Age : 35 Location : São Paulo/Brazil
| Subject: Re: Tuxedo Mistress's A Serious Case Of The Jacket 24th August 2012, 12:57 pm | |
| thank you! this one I got the idea when we were talking during an anime watch night and we were talking about his (lack of) sense of fashion.
it was written well after "I love you"(almost two years apart), but they are really good complements.
thanks for reviewing =) |
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Joshua916 Pyramidal Crystal
Posts : 491 Join date : 2012-08-20 Age : 38 Location : California
| Subject: Re: Tuxedo Mistress's A Serious Case Of The Jacket 24th August 2012, 1:01 pm | |
| Its not a problem. I said I'd look them over and review them, which is exactly what I wanted to do. I just hope you keep on writing more stories, because they do bring out the creative side of you. |
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Luna Nova Lotus Crystal
Title : Dubbed the Official Second Usagi/Bunny ^^and Official Anzamoon Posts : 2817 Join date : 2012-07-19 Age : 28
| Subject: Re: Tuxedo Mistress's A Serious Case Of The Jacket 24th August 2012, 2:41 pm | |
| That was really cute!! The ending was so sweet!! I've always wondered why Mamoru bought that jacket!! Now for the sequel, The More Serious Case of the Pants! |
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Tuxedo Mistress Lotus Crystal
Title : That girl with a Sailor Jupiter tattoo =) Posts : 10799 Join date : 2012-07-25 Age : 35 Location : São Paulo/Brazil
| Subject: Re: Tuxedo Mistress's A Serious Case Of The Jacket 24th August 2012, 2:47 pm | |
| hahaha, yeah. those pants are also a problem... someday, who knows...
thanks for commenting =) |
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