Hello yes I am back from the deadlands of inactivity 

SO I zombiefied myself in order to get some critiques and comments on my latest creation. I've become pretty confident with my graphic making abilities and I usually like what I make but I can't help be greedy for any advice others can give me that will boost me to the next level    iwanttobetheverybest

So seriously my peeps, lay it on me. Don't hold back, I WANT you guys to nick pick this into oblivion. I can handle it. I HAVE THE POWER 

Also beware, this thing is a monster. I've started working with very large formats so I can sell them if I want to but because of it's size I'm not sure if it'll stretch the forum when you open the spoiler 

#ag #agcritique

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Hmm I don't want to start off with the critiques right away and it might be my taste, but I'm not really liking this one in comparison to some previous works of yours. Also, I'm going to keep in mind different brightnesses and stuff on differnet monitors can affect things so that could be an issue here.

I think the top is a bit too blinding and the place where my eyes are drawn too isn't really all that interesting to me. I'm a fan if silouette figures but in this case I think it's too much of the same color. I'm not sure if you were going for a monotone look (cause if so just ignore me) but I feel that either making the figure much darker but staying in the same palette range or doing a completely opposite color that would make it stand out much more.

ALso the space just feels a bit uneven to me. Not that you should have everything in the center but something feels off balance.  Though, having looked at it longer, i am enjoying the negative space you've sort of created with the back of the head and neckline where the text meets up.

Also is the person supposed to be recognizable or is it anonymous? either way works, I was just wondering what your intent was with that.

Last thing is the quote being use, I like how its following that sort of negative space/outlie you made but I'm not 100% certain if I like it there?? Im not really sure how to explain myself with this one or give a suggestion since text is one of my weak areas in graphics anyway. Maybe someone else may have a suggest or different opinion?

Annnnd I can't think of anything specific off the top of my head at the moment. Hope that helps!

Wow! :O I really like the concept you have established for this wallpaper so far!

Brit-chan wrote:

I think the top is a bit too blinding and the place where my eyes are drawn too isn't really all that interesting to me.

I agree with Brit's statement. When I first opened my thread my eyes were immediately drawn to the upper right corner of the image where all of the white is. However, I personally do not think that it's too bright (at least not on my monitor xD), but I do think that cropping off some of that white from the top would help readjust the viewer's focus more toward the really awesome stuff you did with the silhouette/words/clock.


The yellow highlighted part is what I would personally remove or do something to. I know it needs to be a specific dimension since you specified that it would be a wallpaper, so maybe even doing something simple to the topmost white part--like adding in a band of color--would help "frame" the piece so that the viewer's eyes are drawn elsewhere? Edit: Actually, maybe adding some yellow up there might help? I noticed after highlighting the white part that my eyes wanted to go to your flowers around the head instead of the right top of the image. Maybe you could do a band of color complimenting the hue in a part of the background near where you want the eyes to look first?

I hope this helps! Please post the final version once you have it figured out! I'd love to see it again!

@Brit-chan - I think the blinding-ness of the top might be at least partly chalked up to screen differences because for me it's a very light grey/pink up there and not just white. I looked at it on my phone as well and the color seemed the same as on my computer just a shade or two darker. 

With that in mind I can totally see what you mean about it drawing the eyes away from the main part near the bottom so I combined your advice with @Andalusite's and moved things down so I could crop out the brightest part at the top. 

The silhouette is supposed to be anonymous, I just took a male model photo that fit my needs and made it all one color. I do have a texture overlaying the whole thing so that it's not just all one stark color, so I darkened the subject in order to better see the pattern. 

Here's the revised version! Take a look and let me know if the changes help at all  

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