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 Crossover//Civilian: Beat Kisaragi

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PostSubject: Crossover//Civilian: Beat Kisaragi   Crossover//Civilian: Beat Kisaragi I_icon_minitime13th January 2013, 8:05 pm

Character Information


Name:
Beat Kisaragi

Kisaragi is the Japanese synonym for the word "Moon" In the Japanese lunar calendar it means "Changing Clothes." As it is February, it represents, love and longing, feelings he has felt little times in his life. his first name means Rythm, so he can mean "Rythm of the moon that changes clothes."



Age and Date of Birth: A.D. 14/02/1990-2007(on Alter Earth), 3 on Sailor Senshi's Earth. 20 Years old.

Gender: Male

Race: Saiyan

Birthplace: Earth

Height: 1.81 m.

Appearance:

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A well built Young Man with an above-average body. He's a bit muscular but not extremely bulky, he has spiky black hair and black eyes, white skin. The average Saiyan traits. He also has a tail, that he has to hide. His torso and bottoms are both a crimson like red gi and a yellow undershirt, and he wears a blue-aqua colored belt. His shoes are almost black and with yellow ankle wraps. Other attires include a white shirt, a black undershirt, black shoes and white shorts. Whenever he turns Super Saiyan his eyes become Blue, his hair gold and a Golden aura surrounds his Body. While looking at the Full moon, he becomes a giant ape, with black fur, red eyes a large tail. Later in the story he sometimes wears Red Gi with a black undershirt, an aqua Belt, black boots and gloves and a Yellow cape(as chastised by the Sailor Senshi to get at least one new outfit) Beat's Body is not without scars from both training and past battles, yet he doesn't seem to care for this.

His face mostly makes happy or goofy expressions, when he's in battle he changes mostly to a Cocky smile or a serious gesture. While alone gestures of sadness or melancholy can be seen on him. When encountering Miira, the look in his eyes is murderous and rage-filled to the point where even Miira's henchmen step back, when filled with rage, his aura turns pure black bluish and red bolts spark out violently.

One fun fact is that his black bed hair can take up to 2 hours to be as spiky as he wishes and though many people regard it as "inelegant" he's proud of it. His Skin isn't tanned despite the fact that he trained in the Guiana Highlands, as it's mostly rainy in those places. He wears Zero To none Ornaments, and only wears a yellow cape after being ogled by a certain person for a long time.

Skills/Abilities:

As a martial artist, Beat has a myriad of moves physical and long-range. He also has counter-attacks, in which he waits for the opponent to attack, stop them and attack while they have a low guard. His attacks and skills can broken down as follows:

Skill: Ability that Beat can do. Spend little to high energy depending on what is done.

Melee-range: Needs to be done closely or adjacent to the opponent. Uses fist or kicks to strike down opponent

Counter-attack: A very dangerous type of move, Beat needs to wait for opponent's physical attacks, with hands or knees parry their attack and strike. Need to be adjacent but can be extremely effective.

Blast-Range: Launches energy beams or balls at a distance, effective but consume a fair amount of energy.

Ki-charge: An Integral skill to use ki. The user focuses the energy through the body so that it can swell in the muscles, doing so increases strength and speed. In most power ups, the size of the user's aura usually increases and comes out, creating violent gusts of wind and blowing away nearby objects/people depending on level. Increases energy in body but it can be easily interrupted and over usage can make the user tired. Used in every battle he can, not usable at the start.(skill)
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Zenkai(Full Release): An ability that is genetically exclusive to Saiyans. The ability is a genetic trait that allows a Saiyan's power to increase substantially after recovering from near fatal injuries. Although, exploitable it is EXTREMELY DANGEROUS as the user is required to recover from injuries and recover to fullness. As Beat doesn't count with recovery machines or senzu beans(At the beginning) This ability is used, but he's inactive for days.(Skill)
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Dragon Dash: Allows the user to get close to their opponents or run away from them at an amazing speed. The Dragon Dash can be followed up with a regular hit or a charged hit. He or she charges ki to surround their whole body and fly at a high speed. A charged hit from a Dragon Dash allows the user to hit the opponent go through obstacles, energy beams ect. or run away. Useful but requires ki and speed. Easily beaten by opponents with superior speed. Unusable at beginning and middle since his powers are sealed. Use with wisdom.(Skill)
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Sense ki:
It is an ability that allows the user to sense ki and power levels of foes, even if invisible. the stronger and closer the enemy, the more powerful the sensation. Also, if one has higher energy, he can sense strong people from afar. Once a fighter masters the skill, they can use it even when their other five senses are incapacitated. For a fighter with sealed powers, like Beat, doing so means concentrating on the enemy, most times by staying still, concentrating in feel the energy/life but, putting him in grave danger. He mainly uses it to know where his enemy or the Sailor Senshi are, but in battle it is used if the enemy is way too fast or if via illusions, the enemy escapes the eye. A useful skill but dangerous in battle.(Skill)

Animal language: As Saiyans are wild themselves, they can more or less understand animal language, at least in the basic comunication facts. Although, not always comprehensible, depending on animal, mood and instinct, they can at least, undertand animal feelings.(Skill)

That funny helicoptery tail thingy: After understanding his tail is a weaknesss, Beat decides to train his tail, by various methods(Hanging from branches, having it pulled etc.) he spins his tail to remain airborne at a low height for 5 seconds maximum. Useful for when not wanting to use energy, also can be used in a fall to soften impact and the tail can be used to grab itself from many surfaces. As useful as it may be, his tail is rather a soft limb, so he can only be in air for a bit but he can hang with his tail for a long time if not holding anyone.(Skill)

Bukujutsu: Can use ki to fly. Cannot use at the beginning and needs to remaster ki control to do it.
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Oozaru(Giant ape): Whenever he looks at the Full Moon he goes berserk with no control or memory of what he does. Trains to posteriorly control himself. (Skill)
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Super Saiyan(Skill): The legendary warrior among Saiyans, it is said he is born every 1000 years. The Super Saiyan transformation comes in response to a need; It is triggered by either desperation, rage, hatred or indignation.When used, his hair stands up and changes from black to golden. Although the increase in power is massive, it requires a lot of energy for it to be sustained and as such, it isn't suitable for longs periods of time. While transformed,The transformation has a noticeable effect on the Saiyan's personality. Any Saiyan that has turned to the side of good initially becomes ruthless and overcome with rage, and any Saiyan that was already ruthless to begin with has his ruthlessness amplified. Also, if triggered, the person will become much more cocky, sarcastic, rash and belligerent, not having compounds on hurting anyone. The most noticeable change is that the Saiyan's hair becomes golden in color and seems to stand on end, giving it a rising, flame-like appearance. This applies to all of the Saiyan's hair, including scalp hair, eyebrows, and the fur on their tails.

Natural eye color temporarily changes to a greenish-blue, muscle tone becomes more defined, and the skin tone (and clothing) becomes lighter mainly due to the energy, also a golden flame-like aura surrounds the user.When he recovers full power, his aura leaves little golden circular sparkles. The energy output is extremely high; therefore if the user hasn't mastered it, he will lose the transformation. Also, if enough damage is done, the user cannot maintain the output and thus, loses the transformation. On a positive note, it boosts power from 25 to 50 times depending on the physical, mental and other types of training the saiyan has done. Beat achieved this transformation at a very young age, at 10, due to the Timebreakers killing the girl he loved right in front of him; yet his power increase wasn't that much, as he was just a child. Demonstrating that power given isn't definitive and varies among the user. With this transformation, he was able to beat Miira in the other world. Used only in extreme cases.
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Tajū Zanzōken(Multiple Phantom Illusion Fist): The user distracts his/her opponent with several copies of himself that are really afterimages left by moving the body at a great speed. Can be used to dodge attacks by leaving a mirage copy of user. Only lasts for 15 seconds. Use for dodging or confusing the enemy.(Skill)
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Kamehameha (Turtle Devastation Wave): Created by a legendary hero in Beat's world. The user, cups his hands and draws to his/her side and the ki is concentrated into a single point between the cupped hands (the hands must be very close or touching). The hands are then thrust forward to shoot out a streaming, powerful beam of energy. Use for one to one fights and multiple foes, dodge by parrying or cancelling with another energy blast.(Blast-Range)
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Kinryuha(Gold Dragon Wave):Opens palm and sends a yellow beam from hand to target. Fair amount of damage but has a rather linear trajectory, somewhat easy to dodge or divert. Used for one-on-one fights or Multi-men melee.(Blast-range)
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Mangetsu(Full Moon): Created in hand an energy sphere an sends towards target. Spends little energy and inflicts fair damage but can be dodged by parrying or jumping out of the way. Used for one-on-one fights.(Blast-Range)
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Hangetsu(Half Moon): Sends a crescent moon shaped blast up, straight or down. trajectory is variable and inflicts good damage, but its pattern is easily predictable and can be dodged by getting out of the way.(Blast-range)
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Hannazuki(Falling Moon leaves): Charges energy in both hands and either sends a volley of energy balls straight to the target or, fools target by shooting upwards and then, the energy balls rain on target. Explosion of energy balls is rather big. Dodged by parrying all energy balls or by destroying with a beam or bigger energy attack, used for both one-on-one and multiple fights.(Blast-range)
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Ryoukyaku(Dragon King Hurricane kick.): Kicks close range target in a upward fashion, most times in face. A simple but effective attack. Can be parried with hands or dodged by getting away. For single fights only.(Melee-range)
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Chouchu(Hesitate): Strikes with elbow then immediately, switches to a backhand strike to surprise the target. Parried by stopping the elbow and throwing him or hitting him altogether. For single fights mainly.(Melee range)
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Ryuga Sokutou(Dragon fang: immediate response): Waits for foe to strike physically, then parries the attack with his own kick. Then charges ki in his palms, Finally he sends them away with a double open palm energy attack. For single fights only.(Counter-attack)
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Ryuga Renkyaku(Dragon Fang: Lotus Hurricane Kick): Waits for opponent to strike ands stops the blow with forearm then gives a low kick in abdomen or hip areas then end with a high kick, to heavily damage target. For single fights only.(Counter-attack)
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Zenpō chūgaeri(Front somersault): Jumps in air and spins various times to give a punch in the face. Used to cover great distance in a short time. Can be seen from afar and dodged. Use to distract enemy with high speed and mid damage.(Melee-range)
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Ryūshōken(Flying dragon fist): An anti-thesis for Miira's Maou no Ashi. Beat advances on enemy and first gives a strong uppercut while jumping, then in mid-air punches enemy straight in the face and sends them to the ground. Used for 1 on 1. as a physical attack it can be parried or dodged like any other. For lone fights only.(Melee-range)
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Setsubou no Freesia(Freesia of Longing): Approaches opponents rapidly with an uppercut, then does a diagonal kick upward, stopping air momentum, finally in mid-air, does a spinning kick angled downward which knocks down opponents on hit. Quicker than usual so it has higher accuracy. Can be dodged by avoiding or hitting him in his. Mainly for one on one fights.(Melee range)
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Bajit Blade(Rei Ken): Charges condensed energy in his left hand and forms into a sword-like blast that can be controlled to become longer or shorter. despite it requires a fair amount of ki to use, this sword is created by a single usage of energy and can continue to be used without dying out, it is one of Beat's most devastating attacks. Used for both, multiple and single man melee. The blade can be avoided and once tired enough, Beat is vulnerable to attack.(Blast and Melee range)
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Black Onslaught: A Finishing move, used mostly when he recovers some of his power and hatred. Beat hits the target in abdominal areas with his right hand, most of the times inflicting a grievous wound. Then, charges the Bajit sword with his left hand and says "I'll show you what fear is like...there is no hell...just deep nothingness." and hacks the enemy various times. Finally puts out the sword and puts his left palm in front of the target and fires a Kinryuha at point blank, obliterating the target. Consumes all his energy as he has to create an energy blade, can be dodged if the target isn't stunned or by parrying the initial attack. Used for 1 to 1 fights.(Melee-range)

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Hiryu no Tsume(Ice Dragon Claw): Mostly done when he's in despair or angry. Jumps high in the air and appears overhead the surprised enemy. Then with his hand, grabs the opponent's face then, charges up a lot of energy in his arm and slams them towards the ground creating a small explosion. Energy Output is so great that if it hits, leaves his arm bloody or broken. Remaining energy is seen in the shape of feathers, falling in the surroundings. Can be seen by those who outspeed him and vulnerable to attack while trying to ensnare enemy. If it fails, doesn't ensnare opponent's face and Beat will only hit the ground with no energy. For single fights.(Melee-range)
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Mangetsu Ryūshōken(Full moon dragon fist): The same as Ryūshōken, save for the ending. Beat approaches the enemy and gives them an uppercut, while in air, cups both hands together and ends with the "Mangetsu" energy blast inflicting a huge amount of damage. Consumes a lot of energy and since it's at a close range, the first uppercut can be dodged, avoided or parried. Used for single fights.(Melee-range)
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Get...away...from her!/Riot Javelin/Last Riot Javelin(Kanojo no hanarete!/Raioto Javerinu/Ruasto Raioto Javerinu) : One of Beat's Ultimate attacks, and the Anti-thesis to Miira's Maō jigoku ken. Later, renamed Riot Javelin and able to use at will. The first time he uses it is to save a certain someone, thereby the fist name. Beat charges all his energy in his left hand. He puts his hand forward and charges a blue energy sphere, as he draws his arm back, he brings his hand forward and fires the energy blast at the opponent, inflicting massive damage and creating a big explosion. Trajectory is varied and can be controlled by him so it has high accuracy but it can be cancelled out by another energy attack with higher energy output or parried if the target has a higher power level.
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Occupation: Student. Multiple part-time jobs.(Waiter, construction work etc.)


Personality:

Dream: Being a good martial artist, finding the ultimate opponent/fight.

Goal: Buy a house for his parents in Tokyo.

Likes: His Spiky Hair. Eating(specially Spicy and salty food) fighting, reading, sleeping, Bossa Nova and calm music.

Dislikes: People touching his hair or tail without permission; Disordered beds, unorganized bookshelves, huge crowds.

Weaknesses: Tail, hunger, rashness, high self-confidence.
Imposed weakness on him by Ultimate Shenron: faulty ki control, unable to control attacks at will, unable to fly, little stamina.(Regains most by the middle of the story)

Strengths: Physical blows, energy balls(later on story) and speed.

A simple guy, Beat lives mostly for the pleasure of Fighting, that being his main priority. He has an enthusiastic, cheerful personality, as he believes life is just one and be should lived properly. Originally he comes from the Todofune of Tosa, in Japan, but in high school he got a scholarship to Guiana in South America and trained in the Guiana Highlands and some countries in South America. thus making him somewhat of a capable martial artist and adept at surviving in harsh environments. Although he doesn't looks like it, he's clever in battle and although cheerful, he's mature for his age. This is reflected in his belief. the four B's or BBBB("A Brawler with no Brains will Be Beaten"). Despite these facts, he isn't very social. As his main priority is fighting, he believes other people are an obstacle and tries to distance himself from most people. His social and fashion skills are extremely poor to the point of not knowing the Three lights, the Sailor Senshi or the youma attacks in Tokyo, also as he trained in the Guiana Highlands, he is accustomed to being alone for long periods of time.

He has no problem taking people out of his life and going his own way. In the past, while fighting the Timebreakers, he was a hatred filled saiyan whose sole purpose in life was destroying the evil faction that made his world a Hell. He was hell bent on gathering the seven Dragon Balls and changing the world, however, Ultimate Shenron deemed him too dangerous, as he changed the world via violence. To give him one second chance, he sends him to a place where life is apparently normal. Once there, his memories are sealed and fake ones are given to him; to top it all off he lost his powers, though he still keeps a bit of his strength, in comparison to normal humans. His brute strength make the Senshi think he's a type of Youma, thus making him keep distance even from their civilian forms. Upon recovering some of the memories of his past, despite maintaning his optimism and good heart, he becomes lonely, aloof, cynical and somewhat sarcastical. Declaring anyone who gets in his way will be beaten, as he will have revenge on the Time Breakers no matter what, this maintains a sort of friction with the senshi who deem him as an ally but he deems everyone else as an enemy.

Because they use the words "Justice" and "Love" He doesn't believe much in them, though he respects their power. To him justice is too vague, as it isn't absolute and Miira himself claims he is just. Beat believes only in himself, a few people and, that the world can only be changed with violence or by radical action as he did in the past. As such, when he recovers his memories he doesn't view himself as hero, but rather as a destroyer and fighter. Many times he asks the Senshi to prove their justice but gets no answer, thus he works alone to destroy Miira.

In love issues he is not very smart. He's never experimented love, so he gets very confused and frustrated at the fact that he cannot get "that person" out of his head and no amount of training or fighting can help. Whenever "that person" is around others, his loneliness gets the best of him and he merely enjoys seeing her fron a distance. When she is flirting with another guy or happy around other men, he feels "a weird pain" in his chest, and is angry at himself for reasons that escape his comprehending. If he ever feels anything akin to love, albeit unknown to himself, he denies this and tries to forget as to him, finding the ultimate opponent is his goal, yet he cannot severe what he feels...

Although he doesn't come out as bright, he shows some cleverness in battle as his mind quickly comes up with defenses or attacks to fend for himself, however he is quick to attack first as he, most of the times is too overconfident. This is why, many Aliens/Demons/Mercenaries easily beat him up first and despite his hidden strength, he has to rely on others(E.G. Sailor Senshi) to save him. This is why many label him as not the brightest tool in the shed. While he is a good person, he lets no one get in the way of his goal and fails to see other people's concern/feelings for him, this being one of the reasons why Shenron sent him, to understand what a true hero is and more importantly, what human love and concern are. And thanks to a special someone, he finds himself doubting in between hatred and love.(Later in the story)

On an interesting note, his mother urges him to get a girlfriend...


Biography/History:

Originally, he comes from a Violent alter-Earth. Where the world was, "a living hell." A certain organization, known as the "Timbreakers"(Formed from the Red Pants army the spiritual successors of the Red Ribbon Army, Remnants of The Planet trade organization that supposedly died with the Cold Family, Demons and mercenaries from Earth) Beat was out studying in the Guiana Highlands and some countries in South America when, a certain Man gathered the Dragon Balls and with his faction, lead the world into chaos.

Losing most of his relatives in the Timebreakers' Attacks, Beat turned Super Saiyan at a very young age and driven by rage, revenge and lust for battle, constantly opposed them. Finally Seven years later, he is able to defeat the Timebreakers and hand a devastating blow to their ranks. Then, to restore his world to peace, he asked Ultimate Shenron to restore the world. Shenron then chastised Beat, as he changed the world with violence and not by the will of the hearts of people as it should be. He deems the saiyan no better than the Time Breakers, and in exchange for the wish, asks for Beat's Life; To which, he complies.

However, Shenron rather than taking his life, sent him to another Earth, made him forget most of his memories and sealed his powers in an attempt for Beat to live a normal boy's life, reviving his parents, Beat starts anew in the Tokyo, Japan of the Sailor Senshi. However, the TimeBreakers survived and also have gone to that world to wreak havoc. Once Again, The Timebreakers are a menace but the Sailor Senshi are to stop them, however...on whose side is the young man on? He wants to destroy the TimeBreakers but...why doesn't he help the Senshi...?


Quotes:

I win, alright!

Lemme show you the results of my training...come at me!

A...Demon?! YAY! I'll beat him! this is sweet, you don't get to fight a Demon every day!

Time can be...such a cruel thing. Yes, time is the cruelest kindness...

I said I'd change the world and I WILL DO IT!

War's tactics are mysterious and complicated yet simple and flowing. One could say they're like water, flowing smoothly and clearly to win.

I'll show you what fear is like...there is no hell...just deep nothingness.

Snow so white...so pure...just like her. I remember those times...with that person...

What is happening to me? Why...I can't get her out of my head! Focus Beat, focus! You've got no time for this, you need to be the best! That is all there is to it! but...

There is no absolute justice or absolute evil. There are many variants, as colors. Like Good and Evil, Black and White are just a part of the other colors. Your justice...I don't believe in it. As warriors you have my respect but...I fight to destroy and no one will get in the way of my revenge. No one.




To Miira:

How can you still be alive?!

Don't worry, this time...I'll not only give you a one way trip to hell but...I'LL KILL YOU AN INCH AT A TIME!

I won't...FORGIVE YOU!

MIIRA...SHATTER AND DISAPPEAR!!

Time for this "monkey"...to SLAP YOU!

I mean to sever our score Miira and whatever else of you I lay hold off!


Other Noteworthy Facts:


Voiced by: Josh Grelle/Miyu Irino(Dragon Ball Z Ultimate Tenkaichi)

Blood type: B

Favorite gem: Emerald.

Favorite flower: Freesia.

Habits: Rush into battle unprepared, Meditate after each battle, Walking alone, looking at the night sky and full moon, eating like a Pig.

Hobbies: Sewing, reading(Mainly martial arts books and Samurai code Books), training, going downtown to beat punks up.

Favorite subjects: P.E., Language(Involve fighting)

Least favorite subjects: Sociology, Psychology, Social Studies(Remind him he's a lonely, weird and sometimes jerk person who lives only for fighting.)

Musical Themes:

Dragon Soul (Dragon ball HEROES Main theme): https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=kCWknRB7B8w

Nightmare Fiction (Musical theme for Beat vs. Miira. By Daisuke Ishiwatari): https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=W7Ph1T7n6vM

White Requiem (Musical theme for Beat vs. a Certain someone special. By Daisuke Ishiwatari): https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3TyhDmrnaO0&fmt=18



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Notes:
The hero of the Franchise, Dragon Ball Heroes, he had no personality whatever, do I gathered elements from Dragon Ball Online and his own series, Dragon ball Heroes. His surname...I chose Kisaragi because of the need of love due to this tragic past. Many of his attacks are named after the moon. Mangetsu(Full Moon), Hangetsu(Half Moon)as a tribute to the Sailor Moon series, Ironically He loves looking at the full moon but, if he looks at the Moon he turns into an Oozaru. One could define him as a stray lamb, as he seeks something he himself doesn't understand. All I can say is...Rated M...for Manly.













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PostSubject: Re: Crossover//Civilian: Beat Kisaragi   Crossover//Civilian: Beat Kisaragi I_icon_minitime13th January 2013, 9:30 pm

Just a note that I have glanced over the profile, but will not be able to give a full evaluation until tomorrow.
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PostSubject: Re: Crossover//Civilian: Beat Kisaragi   Crossover//Civilian: Beat Kisaragi I_icon_minitime14th January 2013, 5:03 pm

Hello Beat. I am happy to see your interest in our RPG section and character profiles Smile

Before Pluto gets to review this profile could you combine the two parts of the personality information as one, edit the physical description to have the required two paragraphs and also add a RP sample to the end of your profile?
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PostSubject: Re: Crossover//Civilian: Beat Kisaragi   Crossover//Civilian: Beat Kisaragi I_icon_minitime14th January 2013, 8:51 pm

Done and Done. If there are anymore changes needed, please tell me.
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PostSubject: Re: Crossover//Civilian: Beat Kisaragi   Crossover//Civilian: Beat Kisaragi I_icon_minitime14th January 2013, 9:00 pm

Well, I may not be able to deliver your review today or tomorrow, but Wednesday should be clear (the day off between classes, which start tomorrow). In the meantime, could you remove the bold from the body of your text? It's easier on the eyes if only the section headers are bolded and/or italicized.

Thank you, Beat. ^^
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PostSubject: Re: Crossover//Civilian: Beat Kisaragi   Crossover//Civilian: Beat Kisaragi I_icon_minitime23rd January 2013, 6:51 pm

small bump for approval.

also, i'm curious to know, as most DBZ fans would be, so pardon the little nitpicking. exactly how is he a saiyan? are one or both of his parents saiyans? how did they end up on the alter-earth?
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PostSubject: Re: Crossover//Civilian: Beat Kisaragi   Crossover//Civilian: Beat Kisaragi I_icon_minitime23rd January 2013, 8:54 pm

Taken from the elements of Dragonball Online: Beat's alter Earth is a myriad of ethnics, due to Miira destroying new namek, the namekians are on Earth now and even one member of Frieza's family(which is one the persons Beat appreciates most)In A.D. 757 a legendary family of heroes(supposedly Gohan and Goten) Made a book, for normal people to master Ki. They also founded a sword play school.(That's how he learned to fight easily.) For more than a 1000 years people developed these arts and as a result, people in his Earth, were able to use ki, and techniques such as Kaioken.

However, Earth became a bit more unstable. What remaining Saiyans were in the Galaxy moved to Earth to live as mercenaries(some were in missions the day Frieza destroyed planet Vegeta.Such as Broly or Turles) That's how he's born. that's it in a nutshell.
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Thank you for the bump. I'll work on my review after work, and apologize about the tardiness.
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PostSubject: Re: Crossover//Civilian: Beat Kisaragi   Crossover//Civilian: Beat Kisaragi I_icon_minitime1st February 2013, 8:34 am

Arrgh. If it's not one thing, it's another. However, I've reread your profile again, Beat, and I'm thrilled by adjustments that you've made. Some, it appears, since I read it a few days ago.

You've not only fleshed out more of your character, you've also given more attention to his attacks - which makes him much more credible, both as an individual and a character in a larger story.

Pleased to say that you're now APPROVED.
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